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"A Precious Rainbow 2" Chapter 4
MeNobody14 (2013-07-26 00:55:30)*Blarfs*
Now that that's over..
Nice story! A few missing punctuation marks, but really good!
It's time for review, kiddo!
MeNobody14 (2013-07-26 03:03:49)Princess Celestia could easily restore P.P. (
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MeNobody14 (2013-07-26 20:14:36)If I were one of dem lil' ponies, I'd be named "Pwnie".
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Another chapter…yay….
Twilight's House
Next Morning
Twilight Sparkle sat on the couch, quietly reading the newspaper. She had been up all night with Spike for comfort, and as of right now she was incredibly tired. Normally she would just go back to bed, but today was anything but normal. Her friend was still missing, and if anyone came with news on Rarity, she would want to hear it for herself. Trying to shake off the sleepiness, Twilight turned the page of the newspaper, and saw a headline saying "Another Pony Missing: Cupcake Killer Believed to be Responsible" Twilight tried to read through the article, but could barely get through half of it. Despite Rarity being missing for a full day now, the realization had yet to set in that Pinkie had Rarity. That is till now. Twilight dropped the paper as her body was wracked with uncontrollable sobs, the entire time thinking Pinkie has Rarity, oh god Pinkie has Rarity! Twilight hadn't been a victim of Pinkie, but the evidence on Rainbow Dash suggested that the things Pinkie put her victim's through was horrible. And just thinking about that happening to Rarity was too much for the purple unicorn. Rainbow is a tough pony, and she barely recovered! Alone, Twilight Sparkle sobbed as she finally realized that she was losing her friends.
Location Unknown
Rarity stared at the ceiling, trying to take her mind off of her current situation. Just trapped in the lair of a psychotic serial killer who horribly tortures her victims she thought. Nothing to worry about! Glancing down, Rarity saw that her hoof was chipped, and caked in mud. On any other day that would make her crazy, but today she just sighed, and went back to the ceiling. At that moment, a loud bang startled her out of her daze. The sound of hooves clopping against concrete filled her ears, followed by another bang as the door flew open and the lights came on.
Pinkie stood in the doorway, looking down on her prisoner. "Good morning!" Pinkie said cheerily. "I brought you some breakfast! You know what they say, breakfast is the most important meal of the day!"
Rarity looked at Pinkie Pie coldly. "Let me guess. You brought cupcakes" Pinkie Pie just laughed! "No silly, cupcakes aren't a good breakfast food! I brought bacon!" And with that, Pinkie Pie threw a plate of bacon at Rarity's feet.
"Enjoy, I made it just for you!" Pinkie Pie said, before turning around and heading back to where ever she came from. Looking down at the bacon, Rarity sighed, and picked up the plate. Won't do me any good at all to starve she thought. She took a big bite out of a piece of bacon, and immediately noticed that it was extremely tough. Maybe when she went insane she lost her cooking ability. Rarity thought sarcastically. Shaking her head, she continued eating the food until there was none left. As if on cue, Pinkie Pie returned to check on her "guest"
"Oh goody, you ate the entire plate!" Pinkie Pie said enthusiastically. "That's good, I'm going to need you to be at full strength, because today is a very important day for both of us!" Rarity's eyes widened at that.
Pinkie Pie continued. "Ooh we're going to have so much fun!" Laughing, she turned and began to walk out the door but stopped, and commented "Oh yeah, and sorry if the bacon was a bit chewy. I thought that when you boiled and grilled carrots it would make them better, so I assumed it would work the same way with someone named Carrot Top! I mean come on, you have the word carrot in your name, so why don't cook like one!" Shrugging, Pinkie Pie continued on her way, leaving Rarity with the knowledge that she had just eaten a fellow pony, and might soon be next.
Rarity felt the vomit rise, and tried to turn so it would simply go onto the floor, but she had suddenly become extremely weak, and could not lift a hoof. As the vomit splashed out all over her mane, Rarity began to break. I'm going to die. Oh god I'm going to die! Realizing she was losing it, Rarity physically spoke to herself. "Snap out of it Rarity, this is no time for crying. You've got to pull yourself together!" Standing up, Rarity wiped the vomit off of her chest, and began to plot her escape.
Sweet Apple Acres
2:00 PM
Applejack reared her back legs up, and slammed them into an apple tree with all the force she could muster. Turning around, she watched as 2 dozen or so apples fell into the carefully place baskets below. Sighing, she moved onto the next tree. While she didn't want to buck apples in any way today, she needed something to take her mind off of Rarity, and in her mind, the best way to do that was to do something productive. Still every now and then a thought of Rarity crept into her mind, which heavily screwed up her work. While walking to the next tree, Applejack accidentally bumped into Big Macintosh, who was also bucking apples.
"Watch where yer steppin', lil' sister" Big Mac said in his usual southern drawl. Applejack muttered a quick apology, and started to move on her way, but Big Mac blocked her.
"Applejack, why are you out here when you should be with your friends?" Big Mac asked. Applejack gave Big Mac a look. "I need to do something, and why not do something productive?"
Big Mac just shook his head. "Sister, yer just distracting yerself. You've cracked and broken most of the trees anyway, look!" Applejack turned around, and indeed saw that many of the trees she had just bucked were split and broken. She put her head down, and muttered "Jesus, look at me Big Mac. The only thing I'm good at I'm screwing up."
Big Macintosh walked up and hugged his little sister. "Applejack, yer one of the toughest pony's I know, but even you need someone to talk to evr'y now and then, specially since this craziness came up"
Applejack looked up at her older brother. "But besides you, I don't have anyone else to talk to!" Big Macintosh gave his sister a confused look. "Whad about Rainbow Dash? You two were getting' along real nice a few days back!"
Applejack sighed. "Rainbow's got enough problems, she shouldn't have to worry about mine." Big Mac smiled. "Now you don't know that fer certain. Try and talk to Rainbow 'bout this here mess that we're all in. I'm sure she wont mind a bit."
Applejack was about to speak, when she saw a rainbow colored blur coming down the path. 'Scuse me, brother, I think I'm needed." Applejack walked up to Rainbow Dash, who was gasping for air.
"Rainbow, what in tarnation are you doing galloping over here like the end of Equestria is happening?" Rainbow Dash, still gasping, said "Princess Celestia says she knows where Rarity is! We gotta get back to Twilight's!"
Applejack looked stunned by the news. "Okay, hold on a second Rainbow" Turning around, she ran back to Big Macintosh. "I'm sorry Big Mac, but-" Big Mac cut her off.
"Go do what you gotta do sister" he said calmly. "Are you sure?" Applejack asked. Big Mac smiled. "Eeyup" Applejack gave her brother a quick hug. "Alright, thanks!" She returned to Rainbow Dash, and the two ponies began their journey back to Twilights to hear the news on their missing friend.
Twilight Sparkle's House
2:30PM
Rainbow Dash and Applejack burst through the front door of Twilight Sparkles home, and saw Fluttershy and Twilight talking to Princess Celestia. "Good, Applejack, now we can begin" said the princess.
"The Equestrian Intelligence Office has received information on the whereabouts of Pinkie Pie" the princess began. "We believe that Pinkie is holding Rarity in a abandoned rock farm outside of Ponyville."
Rainbow Dash's eyes narrowed. "Rock farm? Didn't Pinkie grow up on a rock farm?" Princess Celestia nodded. "Yes, we do believe that the farm they are on is in fact her old home." Twilight spoke up. "When do you plan to go after Pinkie?" Princess Celestia looked directly at her star pupil.
"We leave for the farm in 30 minutes. You and your friends will stay here." At this Applejack spoke up. 'Now hang on one second, princess. I respect y'all for what you've done and everything, but we gotta right to go help our friend!" The princess barely tolerated this outburst by reminding herself that these ponies were under a lot of stress.
"I'm sorry, but I cannot allow any more civilians to get hurt. Besides, who knows what state Pinky is in. If she saw all of you, she could try and specifically target you ponies, and I wont let that happen." The princess looked around. "Thank you all for being here, but now I must go prepare." The princess quickly turned, and walked out the door, leaving the group speechless.
Twilight looked around at her friends. "Stay here, I' going to go talk to her" Following the princess, Twilight walked out the door, where she found the princess gazing into the sky. Quietly, Twilight walked up beside her mentor. "We could help, you know. And even if we can't, we deserve it. Especially Rainbow Dash."
Princess Celestia sighed. "I won't allow another civilian to die at Pinkie's hands." Twilight looked at the princess. "We're not civilians, Princess. We may be the only way to get Pinkie to come quietly." As she said these words, Twilight noticed that the princess had tears in her eyes.
"Are you okay?" Twilight asked. The princess looked down. "I lost some close friends to Pinkie Pie. Just thinking about what she put them through…it's too much for me. I will not lose another friend, physically or emotionally." Twilight was taken back by this revelation.
"Oh god..I'm sorry, I didn't know." Twilight looked away for a second, found her resolve, then returned her gaze to the princess. "But princess, you have to know, even if you tell us we cannot go, we will find a way to be there. This means so much for us, we need to see this end. Especially Rainbow. She needs closure, needs to know that Pinkie wont hurt her again"
Princess Celestia closed her eyes, as if seeking a moment of peace. Sighing, she said "Tell your friends to get ready. We will leave immediately."