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The Devils Son
MeNobody14 (2013-07-10 17:24:54)Seriously?
No spacing.
Little punctuation.
Terrible capitalization.
It's time for review, kiddo!
Bratniel (2013-07-10 17:58:17)I dont understand why you say No spacing
Little puntuacion
Terrible Capitalization
By the way i am not from united states and i am learning
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Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-10 21:00:38)Bad grammar, And HIGHLY needs originality! 0.0/10.10
MeNobody14 (2013-07-10 21:19:16)^Gee. I guess I'm not the only "Harsh" Critic.
It's time for review, kiddo!
MeNobody14 (2013-07-11 16:12:39)Wait.. Are they guys or girls? This is highly confusing.
It's time for review, kiddo!
Bratniel (2013-07-11 17:02:33)Oh you guys dont know anything exept menobody
You think you are genies
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MeNobody14 (2013-07-11 17:15:10)Actually, Bella does know what she's talking about.
It's time for review, kiddo!
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Story: The Devils Son
Written By: Bratniel
In a small house on a forest lived a family that had 4 members.There were two Girls named Katherine and the other named Ami.The Parents worked on a farm far away from his house.Until the parents got back gramma took care of them.The girls were very strange and weird,they both had red eyes.In school the students called them the devil girls.Gramma was walking to the kitchen and sudently he feels something in the floor...What is this-said gramma.The floor was made of dirt since they would not afford making the floor.Gramma started digging until he found a book.The legend said Legend of the two devils.Hmmm... -Gramma said When the parents arrived gramma was going to her house and he took the book.He started reading the book and it said ¨There were two girls that had red eyes.They were sons of the devil.The devil leaved the girls on a planet named planet Earth to protect them from the war on splactiar(The world were they lived).
Since then the girls live in planet Earth with a fake human body.They will be taken back were they belong.
Gramma closed the book and started crying because he knew that the two girls were Katherine and Ami.
To be continued...
2013-07-11 00:23:59