Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-08 22:43:37)

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I don't like this story o-e

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MeNobody14 (2013-07-08 22:48:46)

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^What she's trying to say is,

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MeNobody14 (2013-07-08 23:42:36)

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Aww.. I hurt squirt's feelings?

Yay.

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MeNobody14 (2013-07-09 00:20:48)

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Lawl. No need to be snappy, I only said "So far." I'm assuming it's gonna get better.

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simmonsa1851 (2013-07-23 11:23:27)

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I just think it should be longer. Otherwise, nice work bro

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simmonsa1851 (2013-07-23 11:45:18)

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I said it was nice

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ConnorRonnoc (2013-07-23 16:56:19)

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Grammar: TERRIBLE
Spelling: GOOD
My understanding of it: BAD
Originality: BAD

Overall total: 5/10= BAD

ConnorRonnoc's Comments:

It's cliche and boring, your spelling is getting better though. Your grammar is terrible especially your sentences.

Example of yours:

Im incorret.But Im still defendeding myself. WRONG.

My Example:

I'm correct. So I can defend myself. RIGHT

There is a space at the beginning of a sentence.

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MeNobody14 (2013-07-23 16:59:35)

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A space between every word, every punctuation mark, and every pause. :l

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