babyboo2314 (2013-06-30 15:26:19)

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cute!n awesome!!

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gurgles1071 (2013-07-14 19:39:26)

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da fauq did i just read

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Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-15 03:38:00)

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0.0/10.10 Please.. Just stop. Seriously just stop writing stories... Just please.

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spadeguy (2013-07-15 04:37:03)

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Yeah. Don't be too harsh, he could grow into a great author. Just a couple of problems in plot logic and grammatical/literal structures.

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Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-15 22:00:28)

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I don't mean to be so harsh, I am just annoyed by so many bad stories. Your right. I just think ~squirtle~ should at least put a little more effort in his stories.

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WYoshiX2 (2013-07-16 01:45:49)

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The ideas are good, but it's hard to follow because of the fluency issues, grammatical errors, and a lack of filling details. The concept is somewhat new, though, and if it had more sense to it, I think it would make a better story.

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ConnorRonnoc (2013-07-25 18:06:42)

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0/10 God, don't write any stories, plus you spelt Arceus wrong.

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2013-07-26 01:07:36

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MeNobody14 (2013-07-26 01:29:18)

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^Proof of your need to improve drastically.

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spadeguy (2013-07-26 01:37:51)

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No. You don't have to do anything you don't want to. Neither do we. Turns out we're looking for what would make you a better writer. Now you don't have to, but until you want to you won't stop being told you're wrong.

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