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The Untold Story
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MeNobody14 (2013-05-11 06:16:20)This is nice. The only thing that bugs me is the misspellings and grammatical errors. I'll give a thumbs up when thats fixed.
It's time for review, kiddo!
~Nia~Teppelin~ (2013-05-13 21:28:10)Added Chapter 6 and Corrected everything
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TUS By: Dalton Jankowski
Chapter 1: Darkness Strikes
One sunny day three Pokémon was playing outside their names were Weocco, Whicco and Riqued. Weocco was a Glaceon with a heart to help and give, Whicco Weocco's brother had a lot of anger issues but always did things right and Riqued a timid Haunter that has a problem with darkness in him. Every Gastly was born with darkness inside them and they had to overcome it, mostly Gastly's have no trouble with the darkness but Haunters do. During that day Weocco notice something off Weocco asked Riqued if something was wrong he said he was ok but he wasn’t....
Soon Riqued goes crazy and the darkness takes over then he pushes Weocco away with a shadow ball, Weocco gets badly injured and he sees Riqued lunging toward his brother Weocco says" Look out Whicco!"
But it was too late soon he changes color of his skin, fur and eyes. Whicco have become possess; soon darkness spread to the skies and Weocco wakes up to see that the end of the world is coming!
Chapter 2: Weocco gives it all
Weocco was shocked what had happened to his brother while he wimped home, he felt like he was helpless and it was all his fault that his brother was possess but that's not the case. Weocco never knew Riqued will ever do something like this but he did, as days passed Weocco trained hard then challenged his possess brother or so called Riqued Whicco. When that day arrived the clash between them feared the towns people Weocco decide to move away from the town just the Riqued Whicco struck him with a shadow ball "Arrrgh!" Weocco shrieked in pain, Weocco lost the fight Riqued Whicco was about to kill him but he changed his mind. He said to Weocco "You have the time to unlock your potential and when you do then we will fight," just then Riqued Whicco put a mark on him on his left back leg it was a marking of the chosen one.
Chapter 3: Rios Death
Weocco felt disappointed for his lose he felt depressed and might not be able to see his brothers smiling face so he turned to Rios his most trusted friend, Rios said he will prepare tonight then take on Riqued and he wants Weocco to be there he accepts. The next day he arrives late but soon Weocco realizes his world is gonna be turned upside down, when Weocco gets there he notices there no fight and Riqued Whicco was gone but he notices a body and blood Weocco is shocked who it is! It’s Rios! Weocco runs up to him and says†WHAT HAPPEN?" Rios says in a faint voice “I was no match for him," Weocco quickly gets medical gear but Rios stopped him and said†I’m not going to make it." Weocco cries and says†YOU CAN’T!†Rios Replies†Yes I am not going to survive and here take this Weocco," he handed him an Amulet. Rios tells Weocco" Take this to remember me," Rios then passes out dead . Weocco yells out" WHHHHHYYYY DAMN YOU RIQUED!" From the time Rios died Weocco still remembers that day and now wants to get revenge, with the Amulet Rios gave him Weocco trains his hardest to his full potential but he is not done training yet.
Chapter 4: Weocco’s last stage
Weocco was almost done with his training all he needed to do is unlock his full mental potential, he went to go meet his dad Wiacco one of the Sages of elements he masters everything. When he arrived Wiacco said" Hey Sonny how have you been?" Weocco explained everything to his dad he was in shock; He said" Well we need to get you in training right away come with me!" Weocco followed his Dad, after a long walk through the woods they reach their destination in a secret place with a lot of pottery and wall carvings. Weocco thought it was a strange place to train but he was ok with it, Wiacco said" Ok let’s start your mental training!" Weocco had serious training he had to concentrate in the most difficult places in the world from under a waterfall to city life Weocco keep pushing until his training was done.
He father was proud of him and he said" Now your ready son go out there and save the world!" Weocco replied" What about you?"Wiacco replied back" Don't worry I will be alright I will be rooting for you here good luck;†Weocco nodded and took off the go visit his friends before his final battle with his brother.
Chapter 5: When Friends meet Foes
Weocco goes to his friend's house and see everyone sad; when he arrives he see the most shocking thing in the world all of his friends are dead! He then finds out that one of his pals Kyurem named Omega was the one behind this but it wasn't his fault he was possess by a posers, then Omega fly’s away to his master Riqued Whicco. Weocco was furious but he notices that one of his friends are moving barely, he runs up to his friend Rico said “You got to help your sister Amy Weocco," Weocco replied" Why is she in trouble?" Rico replied back" Yes you must save her and get the...."Rico dies, without hesitation he goes out and tries to search for his sister Amy and hope she is okay.
Chapter: 6 The search for Amy
Weocco was in stress worrying about his sister every moment, every time he tried to concentrate on something he worrying about his sister bothers him. Then he comes upon a stranger the stranger tells Weocco†Hello Weocco I waited for you to help you with your destiny,†Weocco replies saying†Who are you?†The Stranger replies back†You know who I am Eo,†Weocco is in shock. The stranger was no one other than Foo!†Weocco was in excitement†Foo how are you going to help me?†She replied†By helping you find your sister follow me, Foo and Weocco traveled a far distance but then Foo had to stop she said†I can only go this far the rest is up to you Eo.â€She winked at Weocco and took off; Weocco continued to the path that Foo told him to take. Weocco walk up and was almost there he can see a tower but soon he realizes he is not alone, soon random strings of web strikes Weocco and soon Ariado’s surrounded Weocco he was not match for the Ariado’s and Weocco soon saw white web he was wrapped in a cocoon!
Chapter: 7 Where am I?
Weocco passed out when he was captured but when he woke up he wasn’t in a cocoon anymore but he can see barely then his vision cleared, he notice he was tied up with web just like the web that he was in a cocoon he tried to break it but no use it was too strong. Then he heard a faint voice like it was next to him yelling†Wake up bro!†Soon Weocco opens the rest of his eyes he sees his sister Amy tied up like him but about a couple feet away, Weocco yells out “Sis, Where have you been I was worried about you!†She then frowns and says†Well when I was at home some weird Pokémon called Ariados attacked me,†Weocco replied†Those are the same Pokémon that attacked me!†His sister was in shock and then a dark voice was heard, it was none other than Riqued Whicco!
Chapter 8: What does he want?
Riqued Whicco laughs and says†Well well well look who I found,†Weocco replies†WHY IN THE HECK DID YOU BRING MY SISTER INTO THIS YOU BASTER!†Riqued Whicco laughs†Why can’t I have every right to crush not only you but your friends isn’t that right Omega?†Soon Omega comes out of the sky and does a huge roar that echoes for a long time, Riqued Whicco then says†I even made one of your friends my apprentice!†Weocco then says†What the truck is wrong with you Riqued we were friends and now you’re a ahole!â€Riqued Whicco seems puzzled and says†That was the old me grow up Weocco we will never be friends!†Just then he flings Weocco on the ground and use a Shadow Ball on him, Amy says†STOP IT WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS RIQUED?!†“SHUT YOUR TRAP!â€Whicco Riqued Says as a Ariados shoots web into Amy’s mouth, Weocco says†WHAT THE HELL DO YOU WANT?!â€Whicco Riqued says†World domination and you to die!†Weocco and Amy is shocked and Weocco winks at Amy a certain way she nods and then winks back, Weocco then takes off running and Riqued Whicco says†YOUR NOT GOING ANYWHERE!†But Weocco escapes and cries about it but he had no choice, Riqued Whicco then says†Omega, Ariado’s go after him!†The three Pokémon follows Weocco and now Weocco must run for his life!
Chapter 9: The Runaway Weocco
Weocco run faster and faster trying to stay away from Riqued Whicco’s henchmen including one of his friends Omega, then Weocco notices something he has still some web on him from when he was tied up and realizes that Ariados use this to find it prey so Weocco quickly tries to rub it off but no luck. He keeps running and found a spot where no Ariados will go, The Hazardous Volcano the most dangerous place in the world. On Weocco’s journey he almost got caught but got away in time and made it to the Volcano, Weocco thought he was gonna be ok but he was wrong WAY wrong! When Weocco arrived he rested and then tried to search for food he got luck and found Oran berries and Sitris berries to recover his strength, then he heard a roar it was familiar and then Weocco knew who it was IT WAS OMEGA!
Chapter 10: Weocco vs. Omega
Weocco and Omega was face to face Weocco first hit Omega with a Blizzard attack but it barely hurt Omega ,then he hit him with his most powerful attack Hyper beam but it did not damage Weocco froze realizing that he can’t do anything for a few moments Omega lunges toward him Weocco is done for. Just then a Flash cannon attack comes out of nowhere and strikes Omega in the side he falls in pain because it’s one of Kyurem’s weakness, then another one hits Omega and then a figure appeared it was Kazio a.k.a Octavia one of Weocco’s best friends! But as soon as she appeared she was attacked by the Ariados and tied up but Weocco tried to run but he wanted to help and hit both the Ariados with a Blizzard but they were too strong, then another figure appeared it was Jay he used Flamethrower and made both the Ariados fainted then burned the web to free Octavia. Weocco was glad to see that he had friends by his side, but he still got a long way to beat Riqued Whicco.
Chapter 11: The race to save Amy
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